Children: Concealing Truths, Bribes and Twinkies

Benjamin Busch, the son of novelist Frederick Busch, is a gifted writer, actor, director and producer. In his “My Twinkie Barricade” essay, he delivers a poignant platform for saving Twinkies, the “American snack” he says is in “limbo.” His ability to connect being a child, sneaking and eating an entire box of Twinkies and keeping his father from delivering the punishment, if he’d just come from the snow fortress, was ingenious.  There is probably not one parent or child who can’t relate to a parent offering a Twinkie as a bribe.  Even if a child doesn’t eat Twinkies, parents bribe children with snacks.

The most interesting and compelling part is Busch’s storytelling. His use of visual descriptions and active verbs, as a suggested strategy in Chapter 1 of the DePaul University PR Writing textbook, creates vivid pictures and brings the story to life.

I only have two critiques. One is his use of prepositions. The first quote, “I scurried into the embankment and curled up inside,” Busch should’ve left out “inside” to keep the writing clean succinct and avoid redundancy.  Also, “Then there was quiet. Then I heard the shovel.” He could’ve done without the second “then.”

As Schellhardt suggests, “good writers, must read, read, and read again.” It is obvious that Benjamin Busch is an avid reader.  His story sings and although it may have been perfect timing as a PR piece for saving Twinkies, the other story is clearly about children and how they deal with concealing truths and secrets and parents getting children to confide in them.

1 thought on “Children: Concealing Truths, Bribes and Twinkies

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s